Loké Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 Gads, I'm still giggling from reading it! Link to comment
Bri Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 Gads, I'm still giggling from reading it! Heh, glad you enjoyed it. Link to comment
Bri Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 OH DEAR GOD!!! So, you approve UUF? Link to comment
Userunfriendly Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 OH DEAR GOD!!! So, you approve UUF? OF COURSE!!! still, i kinda liked the original title... Link to comment
BobTokyo Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 Wonderful, beautiful, funny as anything. :p Classic Line : Never hurts to be polite, or so says Auntie. The ending: However, you need one more re-write. Minor nitpics (which in no way make this a less wonderful story): I shall have jam poured on your extremities, and then buried in a pile of fire-ants. Face-first. Edwin does not want to bury jam. fiery temper and scathing temper "Fiery and scathing temper" maybe? Link to comment
Bri Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 still, i kinda liked the original title... Well, the original title, Jan Ampleforeskin was a tad too suggestive... Link to comment
Bri Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 Glad you liked it BobTokyo. And corrections are made. Thanks. Link to comment
cliffette Posted August 4, 2004 Share Posted August 4, 2004 Bri, you didn't disappoint. I'm now going to try seeing Nalia my way once again. Link to comment
Bri Posted August 4, 2004 Share Posted August 4, 2004 Bri, you didn't disappoint. I'm now going to try seeing Nalia my way once again. Heh...well, that isn't hard. Just make sure she doens't find the fur-lined handcuffs. Link to comment
Userunfriendly Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 still, i kinda liked the original title... Well, the original title, Jan Ampleforeskin was a tad too suggestive... when i first read the title, i kept thinking of jan as a (Censored), and tried to imagine him giving an infant boy his (deleted)... Link to comment
Bri Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 still, i kinda liked the original title... Well, the original title, Jan Ampleforeskin was a tad too suggestive... when i first read the title, i kept thinking of jan as a (Censored), and tried to imagine him giving an infant boy his (deleted)... Brist? Link to comment
Userunfriendly Posted August 6, 2004 Share Posted August 6, 2004 still, i kinda liked the original title... Well, the original title, Jan Ampleforeskin was a tad too suggestive... when i first read the title, i kept thinking of jan as a (Censored), and tried to imagine him giving an infant boy his (deleted)... Brist? yes... Link to comment
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