Tentative Minsc-Del ToB banter...

[Bri]

Just to show that Del is still being worked on. This is just a rough sample of a Minsc-Del banter.

 

 

Delainy: "Minsc how can you stand MainChar's pocketplane? Sometimes I feel like I'm going crazy being cooped up there."

 

Minsc: "The pocketplane is not so bad. Sure, it is a little dirty, and it gives Boo split ends, but Minsc welcomes the quiet. Even the mightiest boots of justice need to take a load off from prodding evil's buttocks."

 

Delainy: "Then what is it with the laughter and cries of shock from your corner of the pocketplane?"

 

Minsc: "You heard that? Minsc apologizes, and must remind himself to be ever quiet around she of the wolf ears."

 

Delainy: "No, no, it is quite alright Minsc. But I admit, I'm curious as to what was going on."

 

Minsc: "You need only have asked earlier. Boo, thinking Minsc's spirits were down, and ever putting the needs of his companions above his own, did something about it."

 

Delainy: "Did he offer you a sunflower seed?"

 

Minsc: "No, Boo put on a shadow puppet show! He can make you laugh, he can make you cry. You should hear his red dragon impression. RAARGH! It made me shiver in my britches."

 

Boo: *Squeak*

 

Minsc: "Ooh, good idea Boo!"

 

Delainy: "Um, what was a good idea?"

 

Minsc: "Boo said you could do the back-up vocals. He has a part that would be perfect to you."

 

Delainy: "Uh...let me sleep on it. I'll get back to you later about it."

[Kaeloree]

Oh, my god. You have me hooked. That is so clever... Congrats!

[Colstan]

That's just too funny. I had planned on taking Minsc along with Del anyway but this gives me even more incentive to do so. I look forward to the other "colorful" things Minsc will discuss with her.

 

Good stuff,

 

Colstan

[Bri]

I do think this is one of the better ones written. I just hope that with all the starts and stops, as well as just the sheer time passage, that I can keep some quality going.

[Daeva]

Really good banter, though I would suggest one thing (sorry, probably being pedantic but it stood out to me . . .) - some of the language Minsc uses is very colloquial and seems to stand out from the other dialogue. The only bit I really noticed it in is the following lines:

 

Minsc: "The pocketplane is not so bad. Sure, it is a little dirty, and it gives Boo split ends, but Minsc welcomes the quiet. Even the mightiest boots of justice need to take a load off from prodding evil's buttocks."

<{POST_SNAPBACK}>

I just found this rather jarring in an otherwise excellent banter, especially the use of such terms as "sure, it is a little dirty" or "take a load off" since they just do not match the character. Just a simple change of language would allow it to fit in better, such as:

"boo agrees it is a little dirty and can give him split ends, but he is wise and says minsc should welcome the quiet"

 

or for the latter part:

". . . need to rest lest evil's buttocks should escape a righteous prodding!"

 

As I said, sorry to be petty but it really stood out for me. Coming along spectacularly, though!

[Bri]

*nods* All of these are still works in progress, so I do often go back and change things. What is irritating is when BioWare itself isn't consistent, either.