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Very good start. At least with the first paragraph, it seemed like you caught the essence of Undeath, at least an aspect of it (I mean, becoming a lich would be different than becoming a vampire).


One thing you may wish to be careful of is your spelling. Not that it bothered me, (and I know I make the same mistakes), but I did notice some spelling errors such as contitousnes instead of consciousness. Heh, but as I say, your story was still very clear, and this isn't a big deal to me.

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