Domi Posted January 5, 2005 Share Posted January 5, 2005 I found the story very touching, and it reminded me the setting of my favorite Martin's scene where Sansa builds her snow castle. The theme of war hanging over the festival for Nalia, and Nalia growing into her role as the mistress of the castle are very well done. And of course Delainey's song sounds great in human tongue My two nits are here: Nalia saw that it was only Delainy, the werewolfÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s autumn colored hair shining almost like burnished gold in the rays of the moon. I think it's too much for one sentence. And the second one - someone in the story I tripped over "mage/thief". My prefernce goes for not using game terminology. Or, and did I mention how much I love skating? Link to comment
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