Comments on "The World Turns"

[celticrose]

Nicely done, had me guessing until the line of his, about there being nothing left of her . . . and "their" bond growing.

 

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[Bri]

Indeed, nice short story. Only a suggestion, but you may wish to put spaces between the paragraphs (it makes it easier to read).

[theacefes]

Looks good, keep it up!

[Vestrael]

Really good story-- short and sweet. I like how you take time to develop the PC's character, and how haunted and jaded she is, before introducing "him." (Nice choice, by the way; I thought it was maybe Valygar until the end, but I think Kivan's much better.)

[Vigdis]

Nice tale. I'm into more brutal stories, but can appericate a well - written sweet one as well. And Kivan is a good choice, hehe. Give my congrats to your PC.