cmorgan Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 OK, something fun to play with. My wife and I were watching The Big Country (good movieClassic Western, Gregory Peck and a whole slew of other good folks) and was reminded of how many scenes really ran with no talk at all. Now, the i.e. engine has cutscenes, which can illustrate some things; you could create a movie and import it, etc. And, of course, the general rule of thumb for years has been "avoid text painting and use dialog, letting the player's imagination fill it in". But, flirts have gained a good deal of popularity, and in many mods the "text painting" approach has made action dialogs more acceptable. For younger players, this idea may be pretty new. For all of us who played Zelda and Hitchhiker's Guide as a text adventure, this idea is how we really began the whole gaming thing, with interactive text adventures which allow you to do everything by action - almost no dialog. I suspect there are still folks who play them - I just googled "interactive fiction" and came up with some folks who seem to think the genre is alive and well (and if that is true, then noone should *ever* worry about the death of i.e. modding, because that stuff is way older!) So, let's try a lovetalk that has absolutely no talking, is PG-13, attempts to avoid forcing PC to take actions she doesn't want to do, and has a dash of romance. The early stages of a relationship is a good place tp try this out. Basically, a physical "flirt" that is big enough, varied enough, and fun enough to stand as an unspoken dialog. /* Queen - Somebody To Love */ /* A No-Talk Lovetalk */ /* BG2 LoveTalk 3, c-aranbg2rom = 5 c-aranromtimer,C-ARAN_ROM */ IF ~Global("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",5)~ THEN BEGIN c-aranbg2romtalk3 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in his own thoughts.)~ = ~[ARAN] (Suddenly, he pauses, hiking up his pack.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You stand beside him, eyeing him critically, cross your arms across your body, and send a stern glance his way.)~ + DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ c-aranbg2rom3.stern ++ ~[PC] (You pause beside him but ignore him, carefully studying your left hand and fingernails.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ignore ++ ~[PC] (You move beside him, stepping close to his left shoulder, and help him adjust the strap.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.beside ++ ~[PC] (You walk on past him, flashing him a smile.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.smile END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.stern SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grins uncertainly at you, but does not make eye contact. He unbelts the pack, and sets it down. Twisting this way and that, then flexing his back in a large arc causes long, lean, sharply defined muscles to move. He reaches up to rub the back of his neck.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You ignore him, sigh, and begin studying your fingernails.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, and with quick, efficient motions help loosen his armor.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.loosen ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently helping ease the armour at his neck, and brush his hair back and away from his neck.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.brush ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.push ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.ignore SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran swings his pack down close to your feet, and begins stretching his back. His eyes seem to be locked on your fingertips.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You blow a gentle breath on your nails and then polish them lightly on your collar.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.collar ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.push ++ ~[PC] (You stretch yourself, arching your back like a cat, and running both hands through the hair at the nape of your neck.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.collar ++ ~[PC] (You frown at your fingernails, and bite at one corner of a cuticle.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.beside SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran coughs slightly, and a quiet smile creases his weatherbeaten face. His eyes search for yours.)~ ++ ~[PC] You return his smile, and your eyes meet his.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.eyes ++ ~[PC] You frown in his direction, and shake your head slightly, then nod for him to move on.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] You turn your face from his, pretending to pay attention to your gear, but watch his face from beneath lowered eyelashes.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] You reach up and pat his cheek gently with a cupped palm.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.smile SAY ~[ARAN] He smiles brightly at you, and his eyes follow your form closely as you pass.~ ++ ~[PC] You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.follow ++ ~[PC] You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] You pretend to stumble, and reach an arm out towards him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.arm ++ ~[PC] You ignore his gaze, lift your chin, sniff distainfully, and continue past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails SAY ~[ARAN] Aran resets his pack on his back, and makes a show of stretching and flexing his arms.~ ++ ~[PC] You glance at him from under your eyelashes, and smile.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] You sigh, and brush past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] You point firmly at the pack, then forward, and brush past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.eyes SAY ~[ARAN] His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and he reaches a hand out to tangle in your hair.~ ++ ~[PC] You slap his hand away, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] You mirror his gestures, and play with a lock of his hair, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm ++ ~[PC] You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.push SAY ~[ARAN] He grabs your wrists as the pack slams into his chest, and smiles widely as his fingers trace along your wrists and fingers until he has regained control of it. With a smooth, supple motion he resets his pack on his back, his arching back bringing you both very close together.~ ++ ~[PC] You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] You lean suddenly into him, very, very close - but not touching.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.space ++ ~[PC] You step back, and stick your toungue out at him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] You make a quick cutting gesture across your throat, and brush past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.point SAY ~[ARAN] Aran's eyebrows lift in mock suprise, and he flashes you a wide grin. He bows low at the waist, gesturing to you as if to nobility, and readjusts his gear with an exaggerated puffing of his chest. His wide sweep of arm gestures for you to lead on.~ ++ ~[PC] You grin in return, and your gesture indicates he should lead the way.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You smile, raise your nose in the air, sniff grandly, curtsy with exaggerated motions, and brush past him leading the way.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You send an exasperated glare his way, and motion for him to get moving.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.glare ++ ~[PC] You send him a stern glance, and walk on past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You glare at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.collar SAY ~[ARAN] His eyes follow the motion, and follow down your form, pausing at every appreciable place. Suddenly, his eyes sweep up to meet yours, and his neck blushes a dusky red.~ ++ ~[PC] You smile, loosen the front of your clothing slightly, brushing your hand through your hair.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] You cup his face gently with one of your palms.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm ++ ~[PC] You pretend to stumble, and throw your arm out towards him for 'support'.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.arm ++ ~[PC] You catch his collar and pull him firmly to face you, then make a show of brushing his hair back from his face and generally straightening him up.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.packup SAY ~[ARAN] Aran's eyes lock on yours as he lifts his pack and resettles it on his back. His smile is easy and promising, and his eyes have a hunger hidden in their depths.~ IF ~~ GOTO c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.palm SAY ~[ARAN] A quick hand catches yours, and you feel the sudden warpth and softness of a kiss replacing the sandpapery grit of his close-shaven cheek.~ ++ ~[PC] You jerk your had away quickly and frown at him, pointing for him to get moving again.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] You turn your palm over in his hand, presenting your knuckles to him in courtly manner.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] You catch his other palm and return the kiss.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.suprised ++ ~[PC] You slap him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.slap END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.suprised SAY ~[ARAN] He pulls his palm away quickly, staring at you with suprise. You can feel his pulse pounding as your hand traces down his neck, and he steps away quickly, turning away slightly and readjusting his belt.~ ++ ~[PC] You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You grin a wide grin, glance downward at his 'adjustments', and motion for him to continue in front of you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.glare SAY ~[ARAN] Aran smiles easily, and ignores your icy stare. He tugs a waterskin from his gear, and offers it to you.~ ++ ~[PC] You send him an even more icy glance, and walk on past him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You frown severely, shake your head at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You take his offer, and enjoy a long swig, your back arching as you lift the waterskin.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.beside END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.slap SAY ~[ARAN] Aran grabs his jaw, rubbing away the sting of the slap, and raises both eyebrows in suprise.~ ++ ~[PC] You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You grin a wide grin and motion for him to co ntinue in front of you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.follow SAY ~[ARAN] Aran's eyes are tracing your every curve, and his grin widens. He works his shouders under his pack, and quickens his pace.~ ++ ~[PC] You continue to walk backwards, and watch his long, lean stride as he moves towards you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall ++ ~[PC] You smile sweetly at him, and do a quick twirl in place as you lead the way. ~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] You frown at him, place one finger across your lips to silence him, and blow him a kiss.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.blowkiss ++ ~[PC] You turn back to the front, sure he is maintaining the pace.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] You stop and motion for him to continue past you.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.sultry SAY ~[ARAN] You cannot see him behind you, but you hear his footsteps catch and falter, and his muttered oath as he stumbles. Obviously, his attention has been captured.~ ++ ~[PC] You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] You smile to yourself, and move on.~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] You turn around again, continue to walk backwards, and see if he has recoverd himself.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall SAY ~[ARAN] Aran is blushing hard but has obviously recovered himself. His eyes match yours, and widen in sudden suprise as you catch a heel and have to twist your body around to avoid falling flat on your behind. His laughter is quick and friendly, and it is your turn to feel your face go warm.~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead SAY ~[ARAN] He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. The view from the rear is just what you would want, though he appears oblivious to your gaze.~ ++ ~[PC] You grab the back of his pack and tug gently.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.tug ++ ~[PC] You grab the back of his pack and haul back hard on it.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.haul ++ ~[PC] You run your gaze over broad, strong shoulders, a tight waist, long, muscular legs, and begin to envision the sight without as many garments in the way - and settle back to your travels.~ + c-aranbg2rom3. ++ ~[PC] You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.tuck ++ ~[PC] You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pluck END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.pclead SAY ~[ARAN] As you brush past him, you smell cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. His step is quick behind you.~ ++ ~[PC] You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along ore rapidly.~ + c-aranbg2rom3.follow ++ ~[PC] You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] You smile to yourself, and move on.~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.~ EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.arm SAY ~[ARAN] His arm is strong and tight as it catches you around the waist, and his shoulder catches under your outstretched arm. Quite suddenly, you appear to be waltzing a courtly dance as you move together briefly. He gently steadies you on your feet.~ IF ~~ GOTO c-aranbg2rom3.point END /* missing c-aranbg2rom3.tuck, c-aranbg2rom3.pluck, and c-aranbg2rom3.brush - the last because I forgot it and need more inspiration, the first two because I need to tie them into the subplot about letters home. */ /* Probably should remove the ".tug" and ".haul" options and write them into flirts or another of the lovetalks. There is better opportunity for that tugging and hauling to end up in a tangle of limbs, and a Romantic encounter, which might extend this particular talk too far and make it too long.*/ As always, feedback and suggestions are appreciated. I am hoping for feedback that identifies other options to cover more roleplay options. The assumption is that since the PC (ok, her player, who could be male or female, but hey, this is roleplaying, remember) can turn on and off the lovetalks via PID, she wants to have the interaction. The question is, are enough types of romance wishes covered, or are there pathways that could be improved? Link to comment
cmorgan Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 And you rock - there is definitely a big rewrite headed for this today! Link to comment
Domi Posted January 19, 2009 Share Posted January 19, 2009 Starting with IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.beside you lost the parantheses. I know what you are trying to do here, but I am not sure a large dialgue all composed of actions works as a LT. I'd call it an Aran intiated flirt Link to comment
cmorgan Posted January 20, 2009 Author Share Posted January 20, 2009 Good point. Work so far (draft 2 after feedback): /* Queen - Somebody To Love */ /* A No-Talk Lovetalk - or an extended Aran-Initiated Flirting Opportunity */ /* BG2 LoveTalk 3, c-aranbg2rom = 5 c-aranromtimer,C-ARAN_ROM */ IF ~Global("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",5)~ THEN BEGIN c-aranbg2romtalk3 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in his own thoughts.)~ = ~[ARAN] (Suddenly, he pauses, hiking up his pack.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You stand beside him, eyeing him critically, cross your arms across your body, and send a stern glance his way.)~ + DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ c-aranbg2rom3.stern ++ ~[PC] (You pause beside him but ignore him, carefully studying your left hand and fingernails.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ignore ++ ~[PC] (You move beside him, stepping close to his left shoulder, and help him adjust the strap.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.beside ++ ~[PC] (You walk on past him, flashing him a smile.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.smile END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.stern SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grins uncertainly at you, but does not make eye contact. He unbelts the pack, and sets it down. He twists this way and that, then flexes his back in a languid arc, showing long, lean, sharply defined muscles. He reaches up to rub the back of his neck.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You ignore him, sigh, and begin studying your fingernails.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, and run gentle hands under sections of his armor, attempting to ease the pressure on his neck and back.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.loosen ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.brush ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.push ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.ignore SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran swings his pack down close to your feet, and begins stretching his back. His eyes seem to be locked on your fingertips.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You blow a gentle breath on your nails and then bring them close to your chest, polishing them lightly.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.collar ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.push ++ ~[PC] (You stretch yourself, arching your back like a cat, and running both hands through the hair at the nape of your neck.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.collar ++ ~[PC] (You frown at your fingernails, and bite at one corner of a cuticle.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.beside SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran coughs slightly, and a quiet smile creases his weatherbeaten face. He raises his eyes to yours.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You return his smile, and your eyes meet his.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.eyes ++ ~[PC] (You frown in his direction, and shake your head slightly, then nod for him to move on.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.brush ++ ~[PC] (You turn your face from his, pretending to pay attention to your gear, but watch his face from beneath lowered eyelashes.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails ++ ~[PC] (You cup his face gently with your palm.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.smile SAY ~[ARAN] (He smiles brightly at you, and his eyes follow your form closely as you pass.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.follow ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] (You pretend to stumble, and reach an arm out towards him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.arm ++ ~[PC] (You ignore his gaze, lift your chin, sniff distainfully, and continue past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.fingernails SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran resets his pack on his back, and makes a show of stretching and flexing his arms.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You glance at him from under your eyelashes, and smile.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.brush ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, and brush past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] (You point firmly at the pack, then forward, and brush past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.eyes SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair in return.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You slap his hand away, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You mirror his gestures, and play with a lock of his hair, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm ++ ~[PC] (You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.brush SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You slap his hand away, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You mirror his gestures, and play with a lock of his hair, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm ++ ~[PC] (You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.push SAY ~[ARAN] (He grabs your wrists as the pack slams into his chest, and smiles widely as his fingers trace along your wrists and fingers until he has regained control of it. With a smooth, supple motion he resets his pack on his back, his arching back bringing you both very close together.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You lean suddenly into him, very, very close - but not touching.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.space ++ ~[PC] (You step back, and stick your toungue out at him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You make a quick cutting gesture across your throat, and brush past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.point SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyebrows lift in mock suprise, and he flashes you a wide grin. He bows low at the waist, gesturing to you as if to nobility, and readjusts his gear with an exaggerated puffing of his chest. He gestures for you to lead on with an expansive sweep of his arm.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You grin in return, and your gesture indicates he should lead the way.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You smile, raise your nose in the air, sniff grandly, curtsy with exaggerated motions, and brush past him leading the way.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You send an exasperated glare his way, and motion for him to get moving.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.glare ++ ~[PC] (You send him a stern glance, and walk on past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You glare at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.collar SAY ~[ARAN] (His eyes follow the motion, and follow down your form, pausing at every appreciable place. Suddenly, his eyes sweep up to meet yours, and he blushes a dusky red.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile and loosen the front of your clothing slightly, brushing your hand through your hair.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.packup ++ ~[PC] (You cup his face gently with your palm.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm ++ ~[PC] (You pretend to stumble, and throw your arm out towards him for 'support'.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.arm ++ ~[PC] (You catch his collar and pull him firmly to face you, then make a show of brushing his hair back from his face and generally straightening him up.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.palm END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.packup SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyes lock on yours as he lifts his pack and resettles it on his back. His smile is easy and promising, and his eyes have a hunger hidden in their depths.)~ IF ~~ GOTO c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.palm SAY ~[ARAN] (A quick hand catches yours, and you feel the sudden warmth and softness of a kiss replacing the sandpapery grit of his close-shaven cheek.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You jerk your had away quickly and frown at him, pointing for him to get moving again.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You turn your palm over in his hand, presenting your knuckles to him in courtly manner.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point ++ ~[PC] (You catch his other hand in yours, gently unfolding his fingers, and kiss his palm.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.suprised ++ ~[PC] (You slap him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.slap END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.suprised SAY ~[ARAN] (He pulls his hand away quickly, staring at you with suprise. You can feel his pulse pounding in his throat as your hand traces his outline lightly, and he steps away quickly, turning away slightly and readjusting his belt.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You grin widely, glance downward at his 'adjustments', and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.glare SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran smiles easily and ignores your icy stare. He tugs a waterskin from his gear, and offers it to you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You send him an even more icy glance and walk on past him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You frown severely, shake your head at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You take his offer, and enjoy a long swig, your back arching as you lift the waterskin.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.beside END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.slap SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs his jaw, rubbing away the sting of the slap, and raises both eyebrows in suprise.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You grin a wide grin and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead ++ ~[PC] (You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pclead ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.point END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.follow SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyes are tracing your every curve, and his grin widens. He works his shoulders under his pack, and quickens his pace.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You continue to walk backwards, and watch his long, lean stride as he moves towards you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall ++ ~[PC] (You smile sweetly at him and turn away, letting the sway of your hips tell him all he needs to know about the direction you plan to travel.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] (You frown at him, place one finger across your lips to silence him, and blow him a kiss.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.blowkiss ++ ~[PC] (You turn back to the front, sure he is maintaining the pace.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.sultry ++ ~[PC] (You stop and motion for him to continue past you.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.sultry SAY ~[ARAN] (You cannot see him behind you, but you hear his footsteps catch and falter, and his muttered oath as he stumbles. Obviously, his attention has been captured.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You smile to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You turn around again, continue to walk backwards, and see if he has recoverd himself.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.pcfall SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is blushing burgundy but has obviously recovered himself. His eyes match yours, and widen in sudden suprise as you catch a heel and have to twist your body around to avoid falling flat on your behind. His laughter is quick and friendly, and it is your turn to feel your face go warm.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.aranlead SAY ~[ARAN] (He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. The view from the rear is just as trim and muscular as the view from the front, though he appears oblivious to your gaze.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You grab the back of his pack and tug gently.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.tug ++ ~[PC] (You grab the back of his pack and haul back hard on it.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.haul ++ ~[PC] (You run your gaze over broad shoulders and narrow waist, and begin to envision the sight without quite as many garments in the way.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.tuck ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.pluck END /* Hey, fun with DM-ing!!!! No chance for an opposed roll, which doesn't even exist in 2E rules, but heck, this is cool to play around with... */ IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.tug SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran stumbles slightly, glances back over his shoulder - and stops suddenly directly in front of you.)~ + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, and to your astonishment you actually succeed in avoiding him. Unfortunately, you fail to avoid a slippery spot, and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid running into him, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your dexterity fails you - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,2)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid running into him, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,1)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, and you continue on your way.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.catcharm + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.grin + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.grin + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.grin + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.grin END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.haul SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran stumbles heavily, and swings his arms wildly as he attempts to stabilize himself.)~ + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ouch + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ouch + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ouch + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, and to your astonishment you actually succeed in avoiding it. Unfortunately, as you twist away, you fail to avoid a slippery spot and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid his arm, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.ouch + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,2)~ + ~[PC] (You duck under the oncoming arm, but as you twist away, you fail to avoid a slippery spot and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,1)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, and you continue on your way.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.catcharm + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.ouch SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran frowns in concern as he rubs his elbow, peering anxiously at your chin to make sure there is no real damage done. His relief that only pride is bruised is mirrored in his grin.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.catcharm SAY ~[ARAN] (His shoulder is steady under your grip, and his face threatens to split in half if his grin gets any wider. You steady yourself and continue on your way.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.knockdown SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs clumsily at you, and manages to catch your arm and haul you upright. His face threatens to split in half if his grin gets any wider. You steady yourself and continue on your way.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.pclead SAY ~[ARAN] (As you brush past him, you smell cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. His step is quick behind you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along more rapidly.)~ + c-aranbg2rom3.follow ++ ~[PC] (You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You smile to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ c-aranbg2rom3.arm SAY ~[ARAN] (His arm is firm as it cradles you around the waist, and his shoulder catches under your outstretched arm. Quite suddenly, you appear to be waltzing a courtly dance as you move together. He gently steadies you on your feet.)~ IF ~~ GOTO c-aranbg2rom3.point END /* still missing c-aranbg2rom3.tuck, c-aranbg2rom3.pluck - I need to tie them into the subplot about letters. */ Link to comment
Guest guest Posted January 26, 2009 Share Posted January 26, 2009 I like it. It is definitely something different. The only problem I see is that you don't seem to have responses for c-aranbg2rom3.space and c-aranbg2rom3.blowkiss. Link to comment
PotiusMori Posted February 13, 2009 Share Posted February 13, 2009 I think it's a great idea! It shows a sort of intimacy, I think. They can just enjoy each other's company, without having to talk about anything in particular. And the signals they use show a lot about the characters and their understanding of each other. Just the option of: pointing at his pack, and then at him and THEN forward. That's a lot of effort when nothing's really stopping the PC from saying: 'Just keep walking, Aran'. Maybe just cut it to: You raising your eyebrows adn point towards your destination? Long action chains seem fine when the PC's doing something (eg. You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead), but that chain seems a little tedious. I love some of these options, though. He sounds like a lot of fun. Heh heh. Keep up the excellent work!! Link to comment
cmorgan Posted October 9, 2009 Author Share Posted October 9, 2009 Tightened up some stuff (including that sequence, PoitusMori) and revised: /* Queen - Somebody To Love */ /* A No-Talk Lovetalk - or an extended Aran-Initiated Flirting Opportunity */ /* BG2 LoveTalk 3, c-aranbg2rom = 5 c-aranromtimer,C-ARAN_ROM */ IF ~Global("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",5)~ THEN BEGIN a542 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in his own thoughts.)~ = ~[ARAN] (Suddenly, he pauses, hiking up his pack.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You stand beside him, eyeing him critically, cross your arms across your body, and send a stern glance his way.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + a543 ++ ~[PC] (You pause beside him but ignore him, carefully studying your left hand and fingernails.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + a544 ++ ~[PC] (You move beside him, stepping close to his left shoulder, and help him adjust the strap.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + a545 ++ ~[PC] (You walk on past him, flashing him a smile.)~ DO ~SetGlobal("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",6) RealSetGlobalTimer("c-aranromtimer","GLOBAL",C-ARAN_ROM)~ + a546 END IF ~~ a543 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grins uncertainly at you, but does not make eye contact. He unbelts the pack, and sets it down. He twists this way and that, then flexes his back in a languid arc, showing long, lean, sharply defined muscles. He reaches up to rub the back of his neck.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You ignore him, sigh, and begin studying your fingernails.)~ + a547 ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, and run gentle hands under sections of his armor, attempting to ease the pressure on his neck and back.)~ + a548 ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + a549 ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + a550 ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows and point forward towards your destination.)~ + a551 END IF ~~ a544 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran swings his pack down close to your feet, and begins stretching his back. His eyes seem to be locked on your fingertips.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You blow a gentle breath on your nails and then bring them close to your chest, polishing them lightly.)~ + a552 ++ ~[PC] (You grab the pack and swing it towards him, pushing it into his chest.)~ + a550 ++ ~[PC] (You stretch yourself, arching your back like a cat, and running both hands through the hair at the nape of your neck.)~ + a552 ++ ~[PC] (You frown at your fingernails, and bite at one corner of a cuticle.)~ + a547 ++ ~[PC] (You make a rude hand gesture in his direction, and walk away.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a545 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran coughs slightly, and a quiet smile creases his weatherbeaten face. He raises his eyes to yours.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You return his smile, and your eyes meet his.)~ + a553 ++ ~[PC] (You frown in his direction, and shake your head slightly, then nod for him to move on.)~ + a547 ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + a549 ++ ~[PC] (You turn your face from his, pretending to pay attention to your gear, but watch his face from beneath lowered eyelashes.)~ + a547 ++ ~[PC] (You cup his face gently with your palm.)~ + a554 END IF ~~ a546 SAY ~[ARAN] (He smiles brightly at you, and his eyes follow your form closely as you pass.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along.)~ + a555 ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You pretend to stumble, and reach an arm out towards him.)~ + a561 ++ ~[PC] (You ignore his gaze, lift your chin, sniff distainfully, and continue past him.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You make a rude hand gesture in his direction, spit at his feet, and walk away.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a547 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran resets his pack on his back, and makes a show of stretching and flexing his arms.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You glance at him from under your eyelashes, and smile.)~ + a557 ++ ~[PC] (You step close to him, gently brushing his hair back and running your fingers along his jawline.)~ + a549 ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, and brush past him.)~ + a557 ++ ~[PC] (You point firmly towards your destination, and brush past him.)~ + a557 END IF ~~ a548 SAY ~[ARAN] (The muscles in his back and neck move under your touch, and he sighs. His shrug traps your hand for a moment, then releases it, and he turns to face you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You slap his shoulder gently, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You brush the hair away from his eyes, letting your fingers play in his curls, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.)~ + a554 ++ ~[PC] (You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You cinch the armor with a fierce tug, firmly slap his rear, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You point firmly towards your destination, and brush past him.)~ + a557 END IF ~~a549 SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You slap his hand away, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You mirror his gestures, and play with a lock of his hair, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.)~ + a554 ++ ~[PC] (You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 END IF ~~ a550 SAY ~[ARAN] (He grabs your wrists as the pack slams into his chest, and smiles widely as his fingers trace along your wrists and fingers until he has regained control of it. With a smooth, supple motion he resets his pack on his back, his arching back bringing you both very close together.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows and point forward towards your destination.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You lean suddenly into him, very, very close - but not touching.)~ + a559 ++ ~[PC] (You step back, and stick your toungue out at him.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You make a quick cutting gesture across your throat, and brush past him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You make a rude hand gesture at him and walk on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a551 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyebrows lift in mock suprise, and he flashes you a wide grin. He bows low at the waist, gesturing to you as if to nobility, and readjusts his gear with an exaggerated puffing of his chest. He gestures for you to lead on with an expansive sweep of his arm.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You grin in return, and your gesture indicates he should lead the way.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You smile, raise your nose in the air, sniff grandly, curtsy with exaggerated motions, and brush past him leading the way.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You send an exasperated glare his way, and motion for him to get moving.)~ + a574 ++ ~[PC] (You ignore him completely, and walk on past him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You glare at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.)~ + a558 END IF ~~ a552 SAY ~[ARAN] (His eyes follow the motion, and follow down your form, pausing at every appreciable place. Suddenly, his eyes sweep up to meet yours, and he blushes a dusky red.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile and loosen the front of your clothing slightly, brushing your hand through your hair.)~ + a557 ++ ~[PC] (You cup his face gently with your palm.)~ + a554 ++ ~[PC] (You pretend to stumble, and throw your arm out towards him for 'support'.)~ + a561 ++ ~[PC] (You catch his collar and pull him firmly to face you, then make a show of brushing his hair back from his face and generally straightening him up.)~ + a554 ++ ~[PC] (You point at your bottom, make a kissing sound, and walk away.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a553 SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair in return.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You slap his hand away, and spin quickly and playfully away from him.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You mirror his gestures, and play with a lock of his hair, finally sliding your palm down to cup his rough cheek.)~ + a554 ++ ~[PC] (You lean forward as if to kiss him, but as he leans forward you duck under his embrace and cross your arms, wagging one finger at him and gesturing for him to walk on ahead.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 END IF ~~ a554 SAY ~[ARAN] (A quick hand catches yours, and you feel the sudden warmth and softness of a kiss replacing the sandpapery grit of his close-shaven cheek.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You jerk your hand away quickly and frown at him, pointing for him to get moving again.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You turn your palm over in his hand, presenting your knuckles to him in courtly manner.)~ + a551 ++ ~[PC] (You catch his other hand in yours, gently unfolding his fingers, and kiss his palm.)~ + a562 ++ ~[PC] (You slap him.)~ + a573 END IF ~~ a555 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyes are tracing your every curve, and his grin widens. He works his shoulders under his pack, and quickens his pace.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You continue to walk backwards, and watch his long, lean stride as he moves towards you.)~ + a563 ++ ~[PC] (You smile sweetly at him and turn away, letting the sway of your hips tell him all he needs to know about the direction you plan to travel.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You frown at him, place one finger across your lips to silence him, and blow him a kiss.)~ + a564 ++ ~[PC] (You turn back to the front, sure he is maintaining the pace.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You stop and motion for him to continue past you.)~ + a558 END IF ~~ a556 SAY ~[ARAN] (You cannot see him behind you, but you hear his footsteps catch and falter, and his muttered oath as he stumbles. Obviously, his attention has been captured.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You smile to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You turn around again, continue to walk backwards, and see if he has recoverd himself.)~ + a563 ++ ~[PC] (You pat your bottom, make a kissing sound, and walk on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a557 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyes lock on yours as he lifts his pack and resettles it on his back. His smile is easy and promising, and his eyes have a hunger hidden in their depths.)~ IF ~~ GOTO a558 END IF ~~ a558 SAY ~[ARAN] (He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. The view from the rear is just as trim and muscular as the view from the front, though he appears oblivious to your gaze.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You grab the back of his pack and tug gently.)~ + a567 ++ ~[PC] (You grab the back of his pack and haul back hard on it.)~ + a572 ++ ~[PC] (You run your gaze over broad shoulders and narrow waist, and begin to envision the sight without quite as many garments in the way.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 END IF ~~ a559 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran meets your gaze until a blush begins spreading across his face, and he drops his eyes with a wry grin. He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You shake your head silently and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You run your gaze over broad shoulders and narrow waist, and begin to envision the sight without quite as many garments in the way.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 ++ ~[PC] (You scowl at his receeding form, but move on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a560 SAY ~[ARAN] (As you brush past him, you smell cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. His step is quick behind you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along more rapidly.)~ + a555 ++ ~[PC] (You giggle quietly to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You smile to yourself, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You sigh, mutter something about men and their short attention spans and one-track minds, and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You pat your bottom, make a kissing sound, and walk on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a561 SAY ~[ARAN] (His arm is firm as it cradles you around the waist, and his shoulder catches under your outstretched arm. Quite suddenly, you appear to be waltzing a courtly dance as you move together. He gently steadies you on your feet.)~ IF ~~ GOTO a551 END IF ~~ a562 SAY ~[ARAN] (He pulls his hand away quickly, staring at you with suprise. You can feel his pulse pounding in his throat as your hand traces his outline lightly, and he steps away quickly, turning away slightly and readjusting his belt.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You grin widely, glance downward at his 'adjustments', and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows and point forward towards your destination.)~ + a551 END IF ~~ a563 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is blushing burgundy but has obviously recovered himself. His eyes match yours, and widen in sudden suprise as you catch a heel and have to twist your body around to avoid falling flat on your behind. His laughter is quick and friendly, and it is your turn to feel your face go warm.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ a564 SAY ~[ARAN] (His quick fingers mime catching the kiss and placing it in his pouch. He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You shake your head silently and move on.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You run your gaze over broad shoulders and narrow waist, and begin to envision the sight without quite as many garments in the way.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 ++ ~[PC] (You scowl at his receeding form, but move on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a565 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran glances back at the slight tug, and grins at you as he moves on.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ a566 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran glances back at the slight tug, but does not see that you have the parchament. He grins at you as he moves on.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END /* Hey, fun with DM-ing!!!! No chance for an opposed roll, which doesn't even exist in 2E rules, but heck, this is cool to play around with... */ IF ~~ a567 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran stumbles slightly, glances back over his shoulder - and stops suddenly directly in front of you.)~ /* DM'ed reaction, so only one choice out of all these shows up) */ /* Low Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, and to your astonishment you actually succeed in avoiding him. Unfortunately, you fail to avoid a slippery spot, and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid running into him, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT /* Normal Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to stop, but your dexterity fails you - with a solid *thump* you run into the back of his pack and are knocked off of your feet.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,2)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid running into him, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,1)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, and you continue on your way.)~ EXIT /* High Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + a568 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + a568 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + a568 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + a568 END IF ~~ a568 SAY ~[ARAN] (You can hear his gentle stifled cough of amusement behind you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn and walk backwards, facing him, and gesturing for him to follow along.)~ + a555 ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You sniff distainfully and move on, ignoring him.)~ EXIT ++ ~[PC] (You make a rude hand gesture in his general direction, and walk on.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a569 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran frowns in concern as he rubs his elbow, peering anxiously at your chin to make sure there is no real damage done. His relief that only pride is bruised is mirrored in his grin.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ a570 SAY ~[ARAN] (His shoulder is steady under your grip, and his face threatens to split in half if his grin gets any wider. You steady yourself and continue on your way.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ a571 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs clumsily at you, but manages to catch your arm and haul you upright. His face threatens to split in half if his grin gets any wider. You steady yourself and continue on your way.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT END IF ~~ a572 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran stumbles heavily, and swings his arms wildly as he attempts to stabilize himself.)~ /* DM'ed reaction, so only one choice out of all these shows up) */ /* Low Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + a569 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + a569 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + a569 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, and to your astonishment you actually succeed in avoiding it. Unfortunately, as you twist away, you fail to avoid a slippery spot and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatLT(Player1,8,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (You narrowly avoid his arm, and brush against him hard as you continue on past him.)~ EXIT /* Medium Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,3)~ + ~[PC] (You frantically attempt to avoid the oncoming arm, but your well known lack of dexterity proves itself again - with a solid *thump* you get an elbow on the chin.)~ + a569 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,2)~ + ~[PC] (You duck under the oncoming arm, but as you twist away, you fail to avoid a slippery spot and find yourself tumbling onto the ground.)~ + a571 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,7,DEX) CheckStatLT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(3,1)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, and you continue on your way.)~ EXIT /* High Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,3)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,2)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,1)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT END IF ~~ a573 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs his jaw, rubbing away the sting of the slap, and raises both eyebrows in suprise.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You smile, tilt your head to one side inquiringly, arch your eyebrows, and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You grin a wide grin and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You smile demurely and look down at the ground, arching your neck and avoiding eye contact, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You raise your eyebrows, point at the pack, point at him, and point forward towards your destination.)~ + a551 END IF ~~ a574 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran smiles easily and ignores your icy stare. He tugs a waterskin from his gear, and offers it to you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You send him an even more icy glance and walk on past him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You frown severely, shake your head at him, and gesture that he should lead the way.)~ + a558 ++ ~[PC] (You grab his shoulder roughly, give him a quick shake, and stride in front of him.)~ + a560 ++ ~[PC] (You take his offer, and enjoy a long swig, your back arching as you lift the waterskin.)~ + a545 ++ ~[PC] (You make a rude hand gesture in his general direction, and walk on.)~ EXIT END Are there enough exit points? Link to comment
KIrving Posted October 9, 2009 Share Posted October 9, 2009 Wow, nice. You've certainly allowed for many pc, roleplaying, responses. I hope you don't mind but I noticed some typos and stuff while reading. IF ~Global("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",5)~ THEN BEGIN a542 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in his own thoughts.)~ a nitpick, use of 'own' after 'his' seems redundant. ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556 into ++ ~[PC] (You ignore his gaze, lift your chin, sniff distainfully, and continue past him.)~ + a556 disdainfully SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair.)~ holds SAY ~[ARAN] (He grabs your wrists as the pack slams into his chest, and smiles widely as his fingers trace along your wrists and fingers until he has regained control of it. With a smooth, supple motion he resets his pack on his back, his arching back bringing you both very close together.)~ lots of 'his' and 'back' in this part seems awkward. Perhaps, "..he resets his pack, his arching back bringing you both very close together." (It seems clear that he would be putting his pack on his back without having to say it exactly perhaps.) ++ ~[PC] (You step back, and stick your toungue out at him.)~ tongue IF ~~ a551 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyebrows lift in mock suprise, and he flashes you a wide grin. He bows low at the waist, gesturing to you as if to nobility, and readjusts his gear with an exaggerated puffing of his chest. He gestures for you to lead on with an expansive sweep of his arm.)~ surprise SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair in return.)~ second instance, 'holds' ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 redundancy ++ ~[PC] (You turn your palm over in his hand, presenting your knuckles to him in courtly manner.)~ + a551 "in a courtly" IF ~~ a556 SAY ~[ARAN] (You cannot see him behind you, but you hear his footsteps catch and falter, and his muttered oath as he stumbles. Obviously, his attention has been captured.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You turn around again, continue to walk backwards, and see if he has recoverd himself.)~ + a563 "recovered" IF ~~ a558 SAY ~[ARAN] (He brushes past you with the smell of cured leather, strong soap, evergreen, and sweat. The view from the rear is just as trim and muscular as the view from the front, though he appears oblivious to your gaze.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO "parchment" (There are multiple 'copy and paste' repeats of this typo so you might want to check for them through the lovetalk.) ++ ~[PC] (You scowl at his receeding form, but move on.)~ EXITEND "receding" (There are also some repeats of this typo) IF ~~ a562 SAY ~[ARAN] (He pulls his hand away quickly, staring at you with suprise. You can feel his pulse pounding in his throat as your hand traces his outline lightly, and he steps away quickly, turning away slightly and readjusting his belt.) "surprise" IF ~~ a563 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is blushing burgundy but has obviously recovered himself. His eyes match yours, and widen in sudden suprise as you catch a heel and have to twist your body around to avoid falling flat on your behind. "surprise" IF ~~ a566 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran glances back at the slight tug, but does not see that you have the parchament. He grins at you as he moves on.)~ IF ~~ THEN EXIT "parchment" High Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 "surprises" + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ + a568 "allows" (also other instances of this typo) IF ~~ a568 SAY ~[ARAN] (You can hear his gentle stifled cough of amusement behind you.)~ ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556 ++ ~[PC] (You sniff distainfully and move on, ignoring him.)~ EXIT "into" and "disdainfully" IF ~~ a572 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran stumbles heavily, and swings his arms wildly as he attempts to stabilize himself.)~ /* DM'ed reaction, so only one choice out of all these shows up) */ /* High Dexterity */ + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 "surprises" + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,4)~ + ~[PC] (Your usual nimble agility alows you to duck quickly past him, and you quicken your pace.)~ EXIT "allows" (other instances of this typo as well) IF ~~ a573 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs his jaw, rubbing away the sting of the slap, and raises both eyebrows in suprise.)~ (you know the drill ) ++ ~[PC] (You grin a wide grin and motion for him to continue in front of you.)~ + a558 awkward here, maybe "You grin widely and motion for him to continue.." Eek! I think I got carried away. I hope you don't mind my comments. Link to comment
cmorgan Posted October 10, 2009 Author Share Posted October 10, 2009 I really appreciate the comments! The whole "post all the code" thing is designed to get feedback and make adjustments. Doing a find/replace (I love notepad++) for the typos. lots of 'his' and 'back' in this part seems awkward. Perhaps, "..he resets his pack, his arching back bringing you both very close together." (It seems clear that he would be putting his pack on his back without having to say it exactly perhaps.) and the "grin a wide grin" - Good calls, too - rereading it, it loses all power when it gets tangled up with extra clauses. Changing those puppies - I will post up changes this weekend, with a few other things underway EDIT> changes: [F:\building10109.d]Line 4853 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in his own thoughts.)~ changed to IF ~Global("c-aranbg2rom","GLOBAL",5)~ THEN BEGIN a542 SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is walking close to you, silent except for the occasional slap of leather against metal from his gear. He appears lost in thought.)~ distain||disdain - holy carp - I am completely wrong - distain - to quote the Princess Bride to myself, "I do not think that word means what you think it means"... disdain it is!! I blame the US educational system, myself. (not.) Line 4891 : ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556Line 5078 : ++ ~[PC] (You purposely slow your stride and put a bit more sultriness ino your walk.)~ + a556 repaired [F:\building10109.d]Line 4915 : SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair.)~ Line 4950 : SAY ~[ARAN] (His gaze hold yours for a time, and he moves closer to you, until there are but a few inches between your face and his. His smile becomes more intimate, and his fingers gently stroke your hair in return.)~ repaired to holds *bleh* - will continue tomorrow... Link to comment
cmorgan Posted October 10, 2009 Author Share Posted October 10, 2009 Remaining repairs: [F:\building10109.d]Line 4259 : SAY ~[ARAN] All work an' no play makes <CHARNAME> a dull <PRO_BOYGIRL>. Bast's Babbling Toungue, sorry. Now I sound like on o' them old biddys what chatter on wi' their truisms. Forget it. I'd rather just think up some stories myself, anyways. Let me see... so a handsome, modest sellsword meets this really cute lass...~ Line 4926 : ++ ~[PC] (You step back, and stick your toungue out at him.)~ + a551 both changed to tongue [F:\building10109.d]Line 2319 : + ~Class(Player1,PALADIN_ALL) !Class("c-aran",PALADIN_ALL)~ + ~[PC] I am suprised, Aran. Gentleman's weapons? I am impressed. A good spar to clear the head and focus the mind. Come, now, Aran, let us have a clean fight.~ + a235 Line 3198 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran staggers, suprised, arms enfolding you.)~ Line 3343 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran staggers, suprised, slamming to the ground next to you.)~ Line 4932 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran's eyebrows lift in mock suprise, and he flashes you a wide grin. He bows low at the waist, gesturing to you as if to nobility, and readjusts his gear with an exaggerated puffing of his chest. He gestures for you to lead on with an expansive sweep of his arm.)~ Line 5021 : SAY ~[ARAN] (He pulls his hand away quickly, staring at you with suprise. You can feel his pulse pounding in his throat as your hand traces his outline lightly, and he steps away quickly, turning away slightly and readjusting his belt.)~ Line 5030 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran is blushing burgundy but has obviously recovered himself. His eyes match yours, and widen in sudden suprise as you catch a heel and have to twist your body around to avoid falling flat on your behind. His laughter is quick and friendly, and it is your turn to feel your face go warm.)~ Line 5068 : + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 Line 5112 : + ~CheckStatGT(Player1,13,DEX) RandomNum(5,5)~ + ~[PC] (You slip past him with ease, but in spite of your normally very strong agility a slippery spot suprises you and you reach out to catch his arm.)~ + a570 Line 5120 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran grabs his jaw, rubbing away the sting of the slap, and raises both eyebrows in suprise.)~ Line 5696 : == ~BVICONI~ IF ~InParty("Viconia") InMyArea("Viconia") !StateCheck("Viconia",CD_STATE_NOTVALID)~ THEN ~[VICONIA] With such simplistic strategies, I am suprised you have surived so long, riivil.~ Line 5715 : == ~BVICONI~ IF ~InParty("Viconia") InMyArea("Viconia") !StateCheck("Viconia",CD_STATE_NOTVALID)~ THEN ~[VICONIA] With such simplistic strategies, I am suprised you have surived so long, riivil.~ lots of this one - all changed to surprise [F:\building10109.d]Line 4919 : ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 Line 4954 : ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, put it firmly on his own belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 changed to ++ ~[PC] (You catch his hand, place it firmly on his belt, and walk on ahead of him.)~ + a556 [F:\building10109.d]Line 4960 : ++ ~[PC] (You turn your palm over in his hand, presenting your knuckles to him in courtly manner.)~ + a551 changed to in a courtly manner recoverd > recovered [F:\building10109.d]Line 4993 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 Line 4994 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 Line 5001 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 Line 5002 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 Line 5038 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and tuck it back in.)~ + a565 Line 5039 : ++ ~[PC] (You see a small corner of parchament sticking out of a pocket of his pack, and gently pluck it out.)~ DO ~GiveItemCreate(Player1,"c-alttr1",0,0,0) SetGlobal("c-aranletter1","GLOBAL",1)~ + a566 Line 5049 : SAY ~[ARAN] (Aran glances back at the slight tug, but does not see that you have the parchament. He grins at you as he moves on.)~ all moved to parchment (I really, really need to remember this spelling - I keep making this mistake), receeding > receding 8 instances of alows > allows repaired Thank you! Link to comment
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